Tuesday, 15 September 2015


Success Criteria:

Make the story exciting - by adding juicy, descriptive words,
Plan - use a variety of planning tools, like mind maps and story mountains etc
Plot - you need to know what's happening next
Clues to make it a mystery
Problem - to be solved
Beginning - draw the reader in by setting the scene - crime scene
make sure it's in the right order,
Characters - investigators, culprit, (the person who committed the crime), suspects (people you may question about the crime that may have been involved)
need to be ordinary people
solve the mystery

Once upon a time, there was a girl named Holly. She was feeding 2 dogs named Scruffy and Otis. But Otis was not there! "I'm sure I put Otis back after his walk" said Holly. She got Scruffy and went down to peoples houses to ask if they had seen Otis, but they all said no. They saw a pug running up to them! But it was not Otis. They went home, and she feed Scruffy and put out a bowl of dog food for Otis. Then they went to bed. The next day, Holly grabbed Scruffy and they went looking for Otis. They just missed him because someone just grabbed Otis! Holly and Scruffy still went looking. At the end of the day Scruffy went home but Holly was still looking, but she went home 5 mins later. The next day the lady who found Otis put out posters so the people will know she has got Otis. Holly went and feed Scruffy and then they went for a walk to find Otis. As Holly and Scruffy were walking down the street she saw the poster about Otis. Holly went to the lady's house and got Otis back "Thank you" said Holly.        

The End 

This is my description of Holly, Otis and Scruffy.

Holly 1
Otis 2
Scruffy 3

Holly: brown hair, blue eyes, long hair, 15 years old, Māori and tall.
Otis: pug, small, brown eyes, short hair, 1year old and curly tail.
Scruffy: shih Tzu poodle cross, white hair, 1 year old, curly hair and short hair .

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